Some of my personal songs

[MAFIA]

THE SONG I DID ON MY BIRTHDAY,WICH WAS 3DAYS AGO

Here comes the pain

No.no.no ...oh no no

We aint' gonna die

Yet this feeling is so strong

way stronger than me

so thats why i cry

Sometimes i wanna cry

But most of the times i just think it over

Couse' this pain is stronger than me

So , sometimes i really wanna die

And when the pain comes

And all my fears finally sums

All i hear is your and my heart beat like a drums

Here comes the pain baby

Here comes the.....

Oh no ,no no

We aint' gonna die

Yet this feeling is so strong

way stronger than me

so thats why i cry

Guitar solo part '' aproxy 1min''

And when pain finally comes on my door

I will be ready for this war

I will survive or i will die in gore

So Lord when you see me knockin' on a heavens door

Be so kind ,let me in and do not ignore

Oh no ,no no

We aint' gonna die

Yet this feeling is so strong

way stronger than me

so thats why i cry

Oh no no no

Tell me God why dont i feel anymore

Oh no no no

Tell me Lord why cant it be like before

Oh noooooo

Why have i ever stept into this Civil War

This would be something like Alice in chains....HEAVENS BESIDE YOU with little faster guitar of Cantrell

If you can imagine how would that sound

[MAFIA]

4 Months

Do you hear the unholy bell

Dont you know how the devil lairs smell

Let me sing you a story

Story of 4 months of hell

.....

...

(chorus)

As i have stood thinking i have all

I had many and now i crawl

I was big and now i am small

This was 4 months of hell

Oh baby ....i just wanna be with you

Dont you remember when we was a crew

All these days without you seems so untrue

Dont you know that i am alone now, and we were two

Oh baby ....i just wanna say....thank you

thank you...

(chorus)

As i have stood thinking i have all

I had many and now i crawl

I was big and now i am small

This was 4 months of hell

Dont you know how many times i have cried

I know that i have lived in denial

My love was free and now its tied

So why do you let me live in lie

(chorus)

As i have stood thinking i have all

I had many and now i crawl

I was big and now i am small

This was 4 months of hell

Now my body is trapped inside the cell

Fuck this shit

Fuck this shit

Dont you hear my painful yell

This was my 4 months of hell

So please come back.....

Couse' i need you...

[kevdo242]

The rhymes are a bit too obvious.

[MAFIA]

So

Check some of greatest songs of our time and you will see that many songs are less quality then some of mine

But that still dont make my songs known,and still dont make their songs less quality

Concrete

I am gonna give what you need

I will broke ,you will seed

I will always do anything that you need

Couse' i am the one that make your life compleet

Concrete (whisper)

concrete...(screaming)

concrete ( screaming as fade away)

Living in my world day by day

It is some hard shit to do

Life full of missery

and loved ones far away

concrete.....(scream)

concrete ....(fading away whisper)

I am gonna give you what you need

Follow my rulez and you will feel what you eat

You will taste a bitte flavour in everything that is sweet

I am something that you cannot beat

You start,i compleet

You make , i delete

concrete

concrete...!!!!

Living by me rules is hard to do

Pain is to hard and work to big to overdue

No more plesure,no more games

Living by my rules is something everyone must goes thru

I leed,you bleed

I need,you breed

Concrete....(screaming out loud)

Concrete....(fast whisper talk)

Concrete ....(whisper fading away)

[kevdo242]

So

Check some of greatest songs of our time and you will see that many songs are less quality then some of mine

But that still dont make my songs known,and still dont make their songs less quality

OK, I'll just be frank and say your lyrics are shite, and aren't fit to be even the worst Sebastian Bach B-side.

You don't seem to be able to take constructive criticism, so I might aswell say all this.

[MAFIA]

Haha

Thanks

But they are still better then you can write

Thanks for criticism thought

Shall i write you a song now?

[Maddy158]

hey man , if you cant take the ciriticism then dont post

in all honesty , there below average and the rhymes dont make sense , they pointlessly rhyme . try to write what you know and feel rather what u think well just ryhme.

if you want poeple to kiss your ass for work thats below mediocre your just hurting your self.

you gotta face the truth if you wana improve.

[MAFIA]

Please go practice your guitar skill,you need it.

[Maddy158]

So childish man. unbelievably childish.

your 24 and thats what you write? , my brother wich you mock is 17 , and already's done a better job than you.

as i said before , your lyrics lack meaning , its just pointless rhyming

Edited November 7, 2007 by Maddy158

[highvoltage]

hey man , if you cant take the ciriticism then dont post

in all honesty , there below average and the rhymes dont make sense , they pointlessly rhyme . try to write what you know and feel rather what u think well just ryhme.

if you want poeple to kiss your ass for work thats below mediocre your just hurting your self.

you gotta face the truth if you wana improve.

You could REALLY take some of your OWN advice here, highway_blues.

[MAFIA]

4 real?

Damn dude,awesome !!!

Well tell him that he forgot to play guitar like you did aswell while trying to learn to write poesm

Couse' what i've heard of your guitar work,you sound like elephant farted in your both ears

[kevdo242]

Haha

Thanks

But they are still better then you can write

Thanks for criticism thought

Shall i write you a song now?

Don't go there man. I've written better songs than you could understand.

Also, I can write a song without mentioning the words 'god dammit' or a screaming 'fuck you'.

[JAC185]

English spelling inside songs is quite perfect

That is not true. And sometimes the grammar is off aswell so some bits....you can tell what you mean but its phrased really awkwardly. Obviously english isn't your first language so its not a criticsm, it just detracts from the meaning at times somewhat.

Again, not a bash, just letting you know.

[MAFIA]

Haha

Thanks

But they are still better then you can write

Thanks for criticism thought

Shall i write you a song now?

Don't go there man. I've written better songs than you could understand.

Also, I can write a song without mentioning the words 'god dammit' or a screaming 'fuck you'.

Even gnr used those words in their songs,but i guess you know better ...

[kevdo242]

Haha

Thanks

But they are still better then you can write

Thanks for criticism thought

Shall i write you a song now?

Don't go there man. I've written better songs than you could understand.

Also, I can write a song without mentioning the words 'god dammit' or a screaming 'fuck you'.

Even gnr used those words in their songs,but i guess you know better ...

Clearly I do.

[MAFIA]

Damn

Hahahahahah

:lol:

[highway blues]

Hey dude , seriously , for the good of your self , when someone critic's your work , just let it go .

unless its unfound , and overly blunt .

your lyrics are what they are , and comments made are all honest , you havent nailed kevdo's sister so hes not gona bash you for an unfound reason.

and as to my skill level , well my friend im 16 been playing for a year , and time infront of me is long , and ive ben practicing daily for 2 plus hours , larning chord's ,apregios ,rythym , lead all that i need . id do the same if i was you and go ahead and improve rather than act god sent.

and highvoltage , dickhead, theres a diffrence between a 16 eyar old and a 24 year old , 8 years diffrence , so hypotheticaly he has to be maturer than i ..

Edited November 11, 2007 by highway blues

[MAFIA]

Is that you speaking maddy

[MAFIA]

NEW SONG

Memory

You have seen it all before

Like them ,even you once was small

childhood passed by

like it was a single memory

a memory written on a wall

Cause' i'll never let you go

Like it was yesterday

Oh,hey,oh yea

First day in a school

Your first date

Girls lookin' so freakin' cool

Hey,oh yea

Cause' ill never let you go

Like it was yesterday

Oh,hey oh ,yea

parents rule to obey

First game,even a first play

First love,girls that give it a way

Oh,yeah

Like i will ever let you go

You have seen it all before

And now !!

When you wanna have it all

You must realize

That you cannot have it anymore

It's just pages

Pages fade away

Like it will ever let you go

Like it was yesterday

Oh,yeah oh ,yea

First car and first job

Even first ticket and first globe

Hey,yeah

You think you have seen it all

Like it i will ever let you go

i said!!!!

Ever let you go

Oh memory

Memory of mine

Please dont ever let me go

I am dreamin' every night about you

Oh please,dont ever let me go

''some things we can't live again

so some things we must do right

and if we fail,there is no regret ''

By: BTD

Song dedicated to everyone's memory on a childhood

[Assassin's Creed]

Over blown imagination,

candy bars and television

its all just my ,

my daily fixation

The world is new to me

day to day adventure's

my everyday necessity

monsters in my closet

monsters under my bed

id think about running away

but my magical powers

Dropped the monsters dead

i sat in class

bored n confused

id look around

see a pretty girl smile

should i send her a note

it wasnt my my style

running around

falling down

hurt then

its just funny now

monsters in my closet

monsters under my bed

id think about running away

but my magical powers

Dropped the monsters dead

Teachers come,

come to me

my heads on the table

he calls my name

im up , no more serenity

back to doing math

what a tragedy

i like my song more , i didint finish it. but just thought id write a little of whats been in my mind for a while

Edited March 20, 2008 by Assassin's Creed

[aidlook]

monsters in my closet

monsters under my bed

id think about running away

but my magical powers

Dropped the monsters dead

That's some quality shit right there... And posting under 3 different usernames in the same topic highway_blues...must be some kind of record...

[MAFIA]

Midnight

The father of the night

His teeth are deadly

His heart is black

The Man who lives to bite

As the midnight creeps upon your town

His children will fly above your warm bodies

As he bites another one

Her dead soul fades to black ,

deep in the lake it drowns

*roar* of the beast

The master of the dark

His sins floating on Noah's ship

As he bites another one

His sins become too big to fit the ark

Victims run for their lives, knowing ....

God's scavenger came from night to leave his mark

*Scream* of an virgin

Son of a devil

His lips are poisonous

But his voice is deep,

deeper then life itself

Son of war, Lord of battle

As his army aproaches you

The blood they spill seems so unreal

His hordes will blind you

Pictures of your town's view

Will fade like the souls of mankind

Midnight

Beware what comes with midnight

What flies into the night

He is blood thrsty

Hell's messenger in an angel's disguise

Midnight........

[MAFIA]

Sleepless

Walking down the street

Thinking shall i come home

What will i find

Who will i meet

Walking down to the club

Ordering my jack

Thinking on her sleepless body

And her eyes that fade in black

Lightning my cigar

Running away from myself

Looking in a bar window

All i see is a guilty scar

Her sleepless body

My biggest regret

Walking back home

Thinking what have i done ,

She was so beautiful

Now she's all gone

As i enter my room

She is laying on a bed

I wanna cry

But i feel like something in myself died

I wanna cry

But my eyes are dry

Calling 911

Once again looking at my hands

Trying to convince myself

Her slepless body is nothin' i could do

For everything there is God plans

But truth is

She was beautifull

And now she's dead

Sleep my baby

Your life has just begun

*guitar solo 2-min *

Picking up a gun

As police sirens coming my way

I take a look at her slepless body

She was so beautifull

and now she's so dead

Bang !!!

My head explode

My brain is all over the wall

But i still see her slepless body

Damn .....

My life misery has just begun

[DTGNRVR]

Get pretty good stuff here man! I like 'em!

[MAFIA]

thanks mate