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It has potential. Not bad for your first original song. I think you get more of a "head banging" element if you sped up the tempo of the song, put in some small leads over the rhythm guitar before and after the solo, and add in a thumping bassline to go with the rhythm guitar.

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nice, although part of it sounds like you took it from sabbath's "paranoid".

what did you use to record it? cos its great quality

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yea lol exactly what i was thinking

and it is but thats alright

actually if you sped it up and bit and played those chords longer i bet it would be paranoid

how long have you been playing?

i like the solo

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nice, although part of it sounds like you took it from sabbath's "paranoid".

what did you use to record it? cos its great quality

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yea lol exactly what i was thinking

and it is but thats alright

actually if you sped it up and bit and played those chords longer i bet it would be paranoid

how long have you been playing?

i like the solo

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Crap. You might not belive this, but I've never heard black sabbath - paranoid. Hmm. It's not cool if my song is a ripoff :(

I've played since january. I hope the solo isn't a copy of paranoid-solo. haha :P :P guess not :D

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nice, although part of it sounds like you took it from sabbath's "paranoid".

what did you use to record it? cos its great quality

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yea lol exactly what i was thinking

and it is but thats alright

actually if you sped it up and bit and played those chords longer i bet it would be paranoid

how long have you been playing?

i like the solo

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Crap. You might not belive this, but I've never heard black sabbath - paranoid. Hmm. It's not cool if my song is a ripoff :(

I've played since january. I hope the solo isn't a copy of paranoid-solo. haha :P :P guess not :D

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its no big deal especially if you havnt heard the song

anyway that was actaully quite good considering youve only been playing since january

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The solo sucks, but since you're a rookie, that's totally understandable (it took me a couple of years before I could play cool solos (I wasn't really ambitius back then (I don't know if one can put a parenthesis inside of a parenthesis, but damn, who cares))). :blink:

Back to the topic now. The rhytm guitar is very simple, you have to sophisticate it. The drums were nice though. :)

Keep on practising, gain skill, and you'll be a kick-ass dude sometime in the future.

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Well, yeah it's basically "Paranoid" slowed down and maybe varied a tiny wee bit. I think it kind of drags aswell, speed it up a bit. I did feel a "Sabbathy" vibe with the whole drums and guitar combo, but probably because it's just "Paranoid" played slower :blink:

Solo is decent, could improve it by alot though I think. There's definitely potential there (in your playing) but I'd use that song as a base, maybe get rid of the obvious Paranoid licks/influence and keep on improvin.

Rock on! rock2

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It's a mix between 'Sabbath Bloody Sabbath' and 'Paranoid'

Gnar, the solo ain't that bad...

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Yes it is. As someone said, parts of it is out of key, and that's not good.

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It's a mix between 'Sabbath Bloody Sabbath' and 'Paranoid'

Gnar, the solo ain't that bad...

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Yes it is. As someone said, parts of it is out of key, and that's not good.

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and you my friend, are a butthead

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