Axls Rocket Queen Posted October 26, 2005 Share Posted October 26, 2005 (edited) OK, I'm going to use this thread as a place to put the lyrics I write...comments and criticism very much appreciated...This is exactly as I wrote it...side notes and all, which might not make any sense to anyone but meThis is a work in progress, music and lyrics written in under a half hour, so it's kinda rough around the edges...maybe that's a good thing, iI dunnobacking vocals (in brackets)A real rocker, this one-------------------------------------------------------------'Up All Night'I'm here and now, boyForget about your pastAn' don't take it lying down'Cause I like it fast! --- grr(Oh.......)You kiss and tease me(No.......)That don't please me(Yeah....)Get your timing rightCause honey, we'll be up all night!*Instrumental Jam, ad-lib vocals*You act so shy,Too scared ta fuck meWell baby that won't doNow c'mon and rock me! --- growly 'rock'Get that guitar outStrike a chordKeep it bangin' all nightY'know I'm easily bored(Oh.......)You kiss and tease me(No.......)That don't please me(Yeah....)Get your timing rightHoney, can you keep it up all night?*Guitar Solo* (pornographic sfx...rocket queen style?)(Oh.......)You kiss and tease me(No.......)That don't please me(Yeah....)Get your timing rightCause honey, we'll be...Up all NIGHT!........(ad-lib vocal tail off, instrumental breakdown)*spoken* Think you can take the heat, kid? --- laugh???Owww!!!!© Axls Rocket Queen...I need treatment! ARQ Edited October 28, 2005 by Axls Rocket Queen Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rick Posted October 26, 2005 Share Posted October 26, 2005 Number one here you come R. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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damian 1200 Posted October 28, 2005 Share Posted October 28, 2005 SING IT AND POSTIT NOW! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
damian 1200 Posted October 28, 2005 Share Posted October 28, 2005 AND YOU SAY IM HORNY! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gnfnr86 Posted October 28, 2005 Share Posted October 28, 2005 ARQ go and get laid woman!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axls Rocket Queen Posted October 28, 2005 Author Share Posted October 28, 2005 ARQ go and get laid woman!!! <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axls Rocket Queen Posted October 28, 2005 Author Share Posted October 28, 2005 Wrote this last night. It's not finished, for one thing I'm re-doing the whole first verse as it just doesn't fit. Any advice would help me a lot. Also, it doesn't have a title yet, so I'd be grateful for any suggestionsKiss me.In the pouring rain,Though there's nothing there.Touch my lipsAnd run your fingers thru my hair.I won't feel a single thing...I've been through helland systematic abuse.An empty shell,I guess I'm not much use.You took my prideand killed my soulIt was for my own goodOr so I'm toldThere's nothing you can do with a useless cunt like meTorture me.Scar my tattooed skinYou won't see me cry.Burn my soulAnd break my heart with twisted lies.I won't scream in agony...I've been through helland systematic abuse.An empty shell,I guess I'm not much use.You took my prideand killed my soulIt was for my own goodOr so I'm toldThere's nothing you can do with a useless cunt like meBury me.It's all over nowYou laid me down to die.It's your faultBut don't cry or apologiseI'm not worth the strain...No, no......ARQ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
appetite for illusions Posted October 30, 2005 Share Posted October 30, 2005 Wrote this last night. It's not finished, for one thing I'm re-doing the whole first verse as it just doesn't fit. Any advice would help me a lot. Also, it doesn't have a title yet, so I'd be grateful for any suggestionsKiss me.In the pouring rain,Though there's nothing there.Touch my lipsAnd run your fingers thru my hair.I won't feel a single thing...I've been through helland systematic abuse.An empty shell,I guess I'm not much use.You took my prideand killed my soulIt was for my own goodOr so I'm toldThere's nothing you can do with a useless cunt like meTorture me.Scar my tattooed skinYou won't see me cry.Burn my soulAnd break my heart with twisted lies.I won't scream in agony...I've been through helland systematic abuse.An empty shell,I guess I'm not much use.You took my prideand killed my soulIt was for my own goodOr so I'm toldThere's nothing you can do with a useless cunt like meBury me.It's all over nowYou laid me down to die.It's your faultBut don't cry or apologiseI'm not worth the strain...No, no......ARQ<{POST_SNAPBACK}>Wow and Wow! Very very good. I really like it. Specially the "chorus" (if it is the I've been through hell bit). For some reason I don't like the useless cunt bit. I just don't think (imo) that it fits in with the song. Too aggresive in a way. I know it's an angry song, but I just feel like that line is outta place. Didn't like the first verse as much as the others though. GREAT work. Very talented. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paranoid Android Posted October 30, 2005 Share Posted October 30, 2005 (edited) Oh! Oh! Oh! Do a happy one! Mention the word pony once, and I'll be happy forever. No torture, death or Belgium. Edited October 30, 2005 by Paranoid Android Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axls Rocket Queen Posted October 31, 2005 Author Share Posted October 31, 2005 Wrote this last night. It's not finished, for one thing I'm re-doing the whole first verse as it just doesn't fit. Any advice would help me a lot. Also, it doesn't have a title yet, so I'd be grateful for any suggestionsKiss me.In the pouring rain,Though there's nothing there.Touch my lipsAnd run your fingers thru my hair.I won't feel a single thing...I've been through helland systematic abuse.An empty shell,I guess I'm not much use.You took my prideand killed my soulIt was for my own goodOr so I'm toldThere's nothing you can do with a useless cunt like meTorture me.Scar my tattooed skinYou won't see me cry.Burn my soulAnd break my heart with twisted lies.I won't scream in agony...I've been through helland systematic abuse.An empty shell,I guess I'm not much use.You took my prideand killed my soulIt was for my own goodOr so I'm toldThere's nothing you can do with a useless cunt like meBury me.It's all over nowYou laid me down to die.It's your faultBut don't cry or apologiseI'm not worth the strain...No, no......ARQ<{POST_SNAPBACK}>Wow and Wow! Very very good. I really like it. Specially the "chorus" (if it is the I've been through hell bit). For some reason I don't like the useless cunt bit. I just don't think (imo) that it fits in with the song. Too aggresive in a way. I know it's an angry song, but I just feel like that line is outta place. Didn't like the first verse as much as the others though. GREAT work. Very talented. <{POST_SNAPBACK}>Awww thank you! Yeah, it does need some tweaking...things that don't fit and such. Yeah, that bit is meant to be the chorus. I might post it again when I've re-worked the bits I'm not happy with. But thank you VERY much for the kind words. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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