A song I wrote

[duff_mckagan21]

KING OF THE STREETS

demons dancin fiercley

amongst my wildest dreams

runnin away from pain

it always ends this way

survival my game

play hard to get away

abuse is a virtue

in my world anyway

king of the street

thats who i am

king of the street

catch me if you can'

cruel intentions are made

in my heat of battle

i find it hard to wake

while lifes in dismay

dealers runnin scared

oppose my only threat

i rule this town

i rule this world

im the one to beat

duff

[highvoltage]

Ok, forgive me for being critical here, just being honest.

Doesn't appear to be very cohesive - it needs more structure and more of a point. Also, some lines seem a little similar to your last set of lyrics.

Don't try to sound badass just for the sake of it when you write. Write about something you know about, that way the lyrics will have a personal meaning for you and you'll be able to better express yourself.

(Ps - Try to avoid stereotypes. Too many teenagers write about running away from pain and stuff. I realise that's not what the entire song is about, but you mention it in the first verse. Better to avoid it altogether - it'll set you apart from others and ultimately make your songs more interesting to people)

[zeppelinrocksnexttognr]

(Ps - Try to avoid stereotypes. Too many teenagers write about running away from pain and stuff. I realise that's not what the entire song is about, but you mention it in the first verse. Better to avoid it altogether - it'll set you apart from others and ultimately make your songs more interesting to people)

I think the same thing,I do it sometimes in my writing.But I've avoided that latley. which has made me proud.